interesting (hardly new, but still quite interesting) idea, butchered by the typical «ya» writing: endless intenal monologs (even dialogs seem like monologs here). and what's with this «f» word all over the text? why? what for?dear «ya» authors, you just can't use curses to build tension, it doesn't work that way in a text :-) it's actually the othe way around: you have to build tension with other literary tools for a curse to be naturally inserted if you need it. most times you really don't though.